Fangala the Flying Feline

So you're not sure you like this? I love it! I also love warmth. :D The line about your cat being a space heater is especially gorgeous, but the effect ...

Yay, I love horses too! About this poem, I can definitely see your passion, but it's a little choppy and hard to read. I count the steps I play a ...

Ooh, this is good, Seraph! My only complaint is that you introduce too many characters too quickly. They're good characters, but Nova should have more in-depth interactions with them before ...

Ahem. This is about a black cat leading her random and disorganized army to war against a tribe of cheese-crazed rats. You never would have guessed, I bet. A lusterless ...

Oh my, such potential I see! Although, I think this should be posted in lyrics, just because of the repeated verse. That verse, by the way, is quite lovely in ...

Haha, I can totally hear this on the radio! This is great, really. If this was poetry, the cliches would drive me up the wall, but seeing as this is ...

this is a song about a bat teaching a lame bat how to fly. Hey, don't look at me like that! :) Forearm each a rubber band snapping on a ...

Haha, thanks you guys. No, by all means, critisize away! I totally hear what you're saying. Even when I was posting this piece, I was like, "Minions? Griffins spitting beams ...

Yay, faeries! This is great, and I loved how you rhymed "polka" with "gondolas." (I don't think anyone's done that before.) In the night, under the moon, Nature's beauty carries ...

This is well-written, with a perfect amount of prose--just enough to add beauty but not to much to make the reader constantly flip through a dictionary of metaphors. There are ...

This is gorgeous. It seems like free verse and a defined rhyme scheme at the same time. I look forward to more of your poetry.

Beautiful imagery, but the rhyme scheme is a little jerky. Life is like a cloud, it comes and it goes. Like a cotton or wool puff, When through the wind ...

Stunning. I'm so glad I read this. BBB, you are a truly amazing writer, and I can't wait to read your first published novel.

Are you trying to make me cry? That last scene was amazing. Horribly sad, but amazing. Just one small suggestion: add more sensory detail to break up the dialogue. Other ...

Hi, BBB! Sorry I haven't posted for a while. Anyway, as always it was very good, but I still think you should use more contractions. But your dialogue is improving ...